Critique for Monologuing and Uncomfortable videos

Ok so I definitely know that making videos is not my strong point, well first because the critiques didn't really go well. I kept getting told about sound quality in my monologues but I can understand that and I wish that my camera had a better speaker on it. Also in my monologue video I do know that if I could change things I would, like the background, I would definitely chose another place for it besides my bedroom, that was not a good choice, also I would've chosen probably messier food so that I could get it everywhere and just spit things out at the camera and slurp things better. My uncomfortable video didn't go so well either, and well in my opinion my video to me was uncomfortable because I was aiming for me as the audience but I do know that I could've and should've changed things in this video too. Kathy suggested that I should've let the ants crawl all over the camera and me it as though they were crawling on the viewer and I agree that would've been a better choice to do. From the beginning I should've just shot the ants instead of making the video seem like it was a poorly made documentary. With that being said, I definitely know that I should've done things differently and now I wish that I had of and also I should've spent more time trying to come up with various solutions to what is considered uncomfortable and also what would've been good to rant about.

Different items, different marks

Dang blogger for not rotating these the proper way! Ok so I have sewn on paper before and lemme tell you I still dont really like it, heck I dont really like gluing string down because it doesnt want to stay down on the paper! It wants to stay attached to my finger!!!! But overall I did have fun playing with ink because well I like playing with ink, the sad thing is I need more ink.... but this means I get to get another trip to hobby lobby or michaels soooooooo Im happy lol

string mostly glued

anything composition, I used pine needles and a tree branch

the repetitive composition, its this thing I found outside I couldnt tell you what it is.  Oh and turn your head 90 degrees to the left.

turn your head 90 degrees to the left and view what my hair brush did 

this should be totally flipped over but in a way I kind of like it this way.  Oh and this is my shoe.

Another one that you should tilt your head to the left, these are well forks which I ended up breaking and sending the plastic handle flying across my room. It was an accident I swear, the plastic wasn't sturdy enough lol

Uncomfortable Videos

Ok so the one thing that really makes me uncomfortable is ants especially when their stirred up, just the way they look when they are all stirred up it gives me the heebee jeebees and make my skin crawl and yeah I try to head in the opposite direction if I ever see a stirred up ant pile... So actually doing these videos and getting close ups of the ants stirred up was difficult for me.

This is my 2nd attempt at uncomfortable video making.

This is my final uncomfortable video 

Story revised

Ok so my last story I scrapped because well I didn't like it something in my head kept telling me to scrap it and start over and usually when that thought stays in my head it's usually right so I wrote another story and I actually like this one a whole lot. Also my compositions for it are turning out nicer too.

Have you ever looked back on your life and saw the visible line that divides some situations in half? On one side is the safety zone and the other is the unknown. Even today looking at some situations you can see this dividing line and you wonder if you should stay in the comfort zone or branch out and cross that line hoping that the grass is indeed greener on the other side. One must always be careful because every action has a consequence and they can turn out to be bad or good. Sometimes the dividing line is small like a fence and you can see whats on the other side, usually these small things don't seem so bad or aren't and so you venture forth over it and enjoy the small taste of excitement that comes with it. Then the bigger situations are like this huge wall that obscures your vision so its hard to tell whats on the other side. You may not think it's a bad thing to venture over this wall but the consequences of these actions tend to reveal themselves later on in life. If you do indeed venture beyond this wall do you feel guilty? Disgusted? Ashamed? Happy? Exhilarated and adrenaline pumping? Do you then venture back over the wall to the safety of the comfort zone or choose to stay out there in the unknown? What exactly makes the unknown thats across the wall bad or good? Who says it's good or bad? Do your parents influence these thoughts of whats on the other side? Or does your religion influence you? How about the media? Do you let it tell you whats wrong or right? These inner struggles can occur because some of the things that happening on the other side of the line go against what you've been taught, or it could be because you think people have this image of how you should act and you feel obligated to keep it just so they'll be happy with you. Sometimes it feels as though the dividing line between whats good or bad, wrong or right takes over and focuses on every thing inside your head than on the actual situation at hand. But no matter what life throws at you there will always be a line in your path and it will tempt you to cross it, whether it be a fence you can see over or the huge wall blocking your view. The real question is this, 'if you cross that line will you be prepared to see what happens next?'

Look it's the Reverend!

Look I do my homework! :)

Front of the written section

Back of the written section

And now it's typed

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100 uncomfortables

1. Spiders
2. Roaches
3. Maggets
4. Being in a car thats going 100 miles an hour
5. scratching nails on a chalkboard
6. heights
7. being followed by a creeper in a store or elsewhere
8. lots of people staring at me
9. Justin Beiber
10. large crowds
11. parties, bars, clubs, etc
12. people who drive drunk
13. being pressured to drink
14. homeless people
15. people who stand on street corners and beg for money
16. being alone in the dark
17. thinking someone is behind you in the dark
18. when you go to a public bathroom and the door doesn't lock
19. taking the first test of the semester
20. having to walk down a dark alley
21. hearing things in the dark
22. hearing people yell and scream at each other
23. knowing that life will change on you and you have no control over it
24. math
25. crazy drivers
26. awkward silence
27. being in an elevator by myself
28. sitting extremely close to a fire
29. being alone
30. playing creepy dark (where things pop out randomly at you) first person shooter video games
31. being without my cell phone
32. utensils scratching a glass plate
33. getting a broken bone or seeing broken bones
34. being strangled or abused (seen or possibility of it happening to me)
35. women body builders
36. clowns
37. some projects we do in WASH
38. being surrounded by idiots
39. having to use the bathroom but your no where near one for miles
40. walking in on people having sex
41. hearing people have sex
42. being on an airplane
43. being in a car wreck
44. needles
45. being in a doctors office
46. stirred up fire ant mound
47. driving home at night and the deer on the side of road look like they'll dart out onto the highway at any moment
48. seeing poison ivy (the plant)
49. when your at the checkout line at the grocery store and the person behind you shoves the buggy up your rear
50. when the person driving behind you is so close you cant see their headlights
51. someone gets up in your face and they have really bad breath
52. when someone you dont know invades your personal space
53. someone standing over your shoulder and just stands their watching you work 
54. having to go to the bathroom in a gross unclean gas station bathroom
55. going to the bathroom and afterwards realize their is no toiletpaper... anywhere
56. snakes
57. driving between two 18-wheelers
58. someone comes into the grocery store its obvious they haven't showered in quite some time
59. someone who had bad teeth from dipping, drugs, or just not brushing their teeth
60. donating blood
61. roller coasters
62. driving and a cop starts to follow you
63. riding a horse thats never been ridden before
64. strangers who show up at your doorstep
65. being hit on by another girl, I don't have anything against gay people I just dont swing that way.
66. really hefty women who wear extremely tiny shorts and a spaghetti strap shirt
67. watching a movie with your parents and a sex scenes comes on
68. people who borrow a pen or pencil and give them back after they've been chewed on
69. when I talk to my dad about something and then the situation starts to feel like Im getting yelled at but he's actually not yelling at me, its the way he talks
70. being yelled at
71. when people copy me in any way
72. when a stranger wants to know everything about me, or does
73. when babies scream bloody murder in a store and their parents do nothing about it
74. when a door randomly opens
75. when stuff randomly turns off or on
76. when you run into someone that you really dont wanna see or talk to
77. having a major wedgie in public
78. bridges
79. driving across really tall bridges
80. walking along and finding uneven pavement and down you go, you hope no one saw you fall
81. driving in the city with lots of drivers around you
82. manly women who stare at you for a very long time
83. driving through bad neighborhoods
84. wearing wet socks
85. a bunch of people are in an elevator and someone let loose a silent fart
86. random old men who try to hug you
87. when the speed demon driving looks like they aren't going to stop at the stop sign
88. random people who come up and start talking and wont shut up
89. hospitals
90. having to drive over an extremely large pothole
91. really huge cities
92. you've smashed your finger, now you have to stick a needle in it to let loose the blood and relieve the pressure
93. splinters
94. people who are negative all the time
95. extremely arrogant people
96. people who constantly bash God
97. screwing up something when working at the cash register
98. the person who inspired Code: SNAIL
99. alligators
100. when food smells really bad and your told to eat it.

Imagining lists pt 2, story

(Two little beings are sitting and having an argument)

A – “I’m telling you that choice right there is obviously the better of the two.”

D – “And I’m telling you that the other choice is better, so much better!!!!”

A – “And why pray tell is the other choice better?”

D – “Well it’s obvious isn’t it? Just look at all the stuff that comes with it, I mean, come on! Everyone knows that the more you have the better it is!”

A – “Tsk tsk tsk, just because it’s got more stuff on it doesn’t mean that it’s better. Sometimes simple is indeed the better way to go.”

D – “Simple? Really? Who wants to be simple anyways? More stuff may mean more complex but it really does mean that it’s better!”

A – “I have a suggestion, how about we let her decide what to do?”

D – “ Why should we let her decide? I know what’s better for her more than you do!”

A – “ And what makes you so sure? I’m not the one telling her more is better and why must you always say that your better?!”

D – “Because it’s true, now why don’t you just go shove that harp…..

L – “Oh my gosh would you two seriously be QUIET?!!! The fact that you two are arguing and that I’m actually listening to this conversation is making me feel like I’m close to insanity!”

A – “…..”

D – “…..”

L – “Besides I’ve already chosen which one I’m going to go with.”

A & D – “WHICH ONE?”

L – “I’m going with both slices of cheesecake because you simply can’t go wrong with cheesecake!”

Lists: 

- well the whole thing is sound because its a conversation between 3 people.

- "Tsk, tsk, tsk" - considered as texture

- "just because it's got more stuff on it doesn't mean that it's better" - considered as point

- "Because it’s true, now why don’t you just go shove that harp..." - in my opinion I think it may try to be direction, motion and could end in pain if the sentence were continued.

- “I’m going with both slices of cheesecake because you simply can’t go wrong with cheesecake!” - in my opinion this is direction because she chose which way she was going to go

- “Well it’s obvious isn’t it? Just look at all the stuff that comes with it, I mean, come on! Everyone knows that the more you have the better it is!” - has Sight

- the whole thing may have a sense of time because you really dont know how much time has passed or how long the two have been arguing.