Story revised

Ok so my last story I scrapped because well I didn't like it something in my head kept telling me to scrap it and start over and usually when that thought stays in my head it's usually right so I wrote another story and I actually like this one a whole lot. Also my compositions for it are turning out nicer too.

Have you ever looked back on your life and saw the visible line that divides some situations in half? On one side is the safety zone and the other is the unknown. Even today looking at some situations you can see this dividing line and you wonder if you should stay in the comfort zone or branch out and cross that line hoping that the grass is indeed greener on the other side. One must always be careful because every action has a consequence and they can turn out to be bad or good. Sometimes the dividing line is small like a fence and you can see whats on the other side, usually these small things don't seem so bad or aren't and so you venture forth over it and enjoy the small taste of excitement that comes with it. Then the bigger situations are like this huge wall that obscures your vision so its hard to tell whats on the other side. You may not think it's a bad thing to venture over this wall but the consequences of these actions tend to reveal themselves later on in life. If you do indeed venture beyond this wall do you feel guilty? Disgusted? Ashamed? Happy? Exhilarated and adrenaline pumping? Do you then venture back over the wall to the safety of the comfort zone or choose to stay out there in the unknown? What exactly makes the unknown thats across the wall bad or good? Who says it's good or bad? Do your parents influence these thoughts of whats on the other side? Or does your religion influence you? How about the media? Do you let it tell you whats wrong or right? These inner struggles can occur because some of the things that happening on the other side of the line go against what you've been taught, or it could be because you think people have this image of how you should act and you feel obligated to keep it just so they'll be happy with you. Sometimes it feels as though the dividing line between whats good or bad, wrong or right takes over and focuses on every thing inside your head than on the actual situation at hand. But no matter what life throws at you there will always be a line in your path and it will tempt you to cross it, whether it be a fence you can see over or the huge wall blocking your view. The real question is this, 'if you cross that line will you be prepared to see what happens next?'